Monday, 30 June 2014

Lone Robot

WALT: To Show Not Tell
WALT: Uses Punctuation

As I was walking all I could hear was the sound of crackling underneath my feet. As I look up I can see a chug of black puff so I go and check it out. I see it so I hop on it but I wonder where is it taking me? my tummy was speaking to me then I hear the breaks and the gates open to what looks like a factory I was thinking this doesn't look good in fact it looked really bad

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